Instant, omnipresent, virtual and anonymous are attributes of Cyberspace. Since the creation of cyberspace, combinations of these attributes are the foundation of many dot-com businesses. However, anonymity is also a threat to the success of cyberspace. One Japanese newspaper reported that (1) hacker using (2) prepaid wireless service card to commit crimes has created (3) problem (4) in police investigation.
In Japan, wireless access is available to user (5) with a pre-paid card, which can be brought from convenient stores. Wireless access free (6) the user from physical constraints (7) but at the same time (8) created a new loophole for criminals. Physical location is no longer a (9) trait for online investigations. Matching virtual identity to (10) real person has one more obstacles (11).
To cope with these new challenges, Japan governments (12) are requesting shopkeepers to do a background check. This is similar to what I experienced in Italy, where the internet café operator requested (13) to photocopy my passport before allowing me to use the paid-internet service. Fraud prevention and anti-terrorism are the reasons behind these background check measures (14). However, these measures created privacy issues.
(15) Hong Kong government is building a public accessible wireless network and is (16) also facing the same dilemma. (17) Association between real and virtual identity will be a never-ending debate and challenge as we go further on (18) digital age one-way road.
Footnotesenglish writing practice
(1) "hacker" is a noun and therefore should be preceded by "a" or "the." I think that "a" makes most sense here.
(2) "card" is a noun and therefore should be preceded by "a" or "the." The correct choice appears to be "a.' (e.g., "a prepaid wireless ser vice card)
(3) "problem" is a noun and therefore should be preceded by "a" or "the." You would need no "a" or "the" if you changed "problem" to "problems."
(4) I think that "for police investigation" might be a little more suitable than "in police investigation."
(5) "user" should be preceded by "a" or "the" ("a" would be correct) or changed to "users." I think the last alternative makes most sense.
(6) "free" should be changed to "frees" because the subject (wireless) is singular. If the subject was plural (e.g., the children speak) , you would use no "s" ending for the verb.
(7) When "but" is used as a conjunction (to join two parts of a sentence together), it ia preceded by a comma (i.e., ,) If this sounds complicated, just remember to always precede "but" by a comma.
(8) You can use "creates" instead of "created" if you wish so that you are consistent in your verb tense. That is, both "frees" and "creates" would be the present tense of their respective verbs.
(9) "trait" is not the word you want. I think that "factor" might be better. Alternatively, you could express the thought like this: "Physical location is no longer of importance in online investigations."
(10)"person" is a noun and therefore should be preceded by "a" or "the." (e.g.,
"the real person")
(11) You might consider replacing "obstacles" with "challenges."
(12) You are using "Japan governments." It should be "Japan's government(s)
or "Japanese governments." Since you are using the plural form of
governments, I assume that you mean all levels of government, including
municipal, state, and federal.
(13) Instead of "where the internet café operator requested to
photocopy my passport" I would write, "where the internet café operator
asked permission to photocopy my passport."
(14) You wrote" behind these background check measures" You do not need
both "background checks" and 'measures/" Choose one.
(15) "government" is a noun and therefore should be preceded by "the" (i.e.,
"The Hong Kong government") - OR - use "Hong Kong's government."
(16) I don't think that you need "also" in this sentence. It is not contributing
(17) "Association" is a noun and therefore should be preceded by "an" or "the"
(e.g., "The association").
(18) "age" is a noun and therefore should be preceded by "a" or "the." The
correct one to use here is "the" (e.g., the digital age one-way road - or -
the digital age's one-way road )
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