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There is much debate in the corporate world (1) that whether a 'flat' organizational structure is (2) more likely to encourage collegiality and cooperation among employees. Some people believe that certain levels of hierarchy are essential (3) to the efficiency of corporations. (4) While others suggest that the (5) flat the organizational structure is, the better employees would perform. In my view, (6) to keep the organization structure as flat as possible would benefit the organization most. My view can be (7) great substantiated by the reasons addressed below.
First, a great amount of organizational (8) overheads could be reduced by (9) flatting the organizational structure. In any corporation, there are always many middle-level managers who are dedicated to (10) manage people, but not directly (11) serve clients. A flat (12) organization structure can reduce those overheads substantially. For example, a company that I worked before has 500 employees. (13) Among them, more than 100 are managers. By flatting the hierarchy from (14) 4 to 3, the company can eliminate 20 of the middle level managers.
Second, (15) flat organization structure would smooth the information flow in the organization. To ensure that the important information passes among employees at various levels effectively and efficiently is always a challenge (16) to many organizations. In an organization with (17) 7 levels hierarchy, it would take (14) 7 or even more steps for the information from front line sales to reach the CEO, compared to (14) 3 or fewer steps in (18) the organization with flatter structure. The difference might have as big (19) impact as either losing or saving a deal.
Although some people would argue that a flat (12) organization structure would result in less 'top-down' authority, and therefore reduce the efficiency of the organization. (20) However, I would very much disagree with it. A good manager should always drive employees through encouragement and motivation, but not through position power.
It would never be easy to design the best organization structure. Still, I believe that a 'flat' structure is more likely to benefit the organization. It reduces the overhead, (21) smooth the information flow, and thus encourage collegiality and cooperation among employees.
Footnotesenglish writing practice
(1) Correction: Change "that" to "over."
(2) Suggestion: Delete "more" as it implies "more than." However, you did not mention an alternative organizational structure.
(3) Suggestion only" "for" would be better than "to."
(4) Suggestion only: Delete "While" and begin the sentence with "Others" or "In contrast, others" or "On the other hand, others."
(5) Correction: Use: "flatter" (adverb) here instead of "flat" (adjective).
(6) Suggestion only: You can use "keeping" in place of "to keep."
(7) Correction: Use "greatly" (adverb) here instead of "great" (adjective).
(8) Correction: Use "overhead" instead of "overheads."
(9) Correction: Use "flattening" instead of "flatting."
(10) Correction: Use "managing" (or "management of") instead of "manage."
(11) Correction: Use "to serving" instead of "serve."
(12) Correction: You should use "organizational" (adjective) rather than "organization" (noun). The noun is "structure."
(13) Suggestion only: Change "Among them, more than 100 are managers" to "More than 100 of them are managers."
(14) Correction: Spell out 0 to 9 inclusive (e.g., zero, nine). Also, four to three what? Use "By flattening the hierarchy from four to three levels, the company can eliminate 20 of the middle level managers."
(15) Correction: Insert "a."
(16) Suggestion only: "in" or "for" would be better than "to."
(17) Suggestion only: Try "a hierarchy of seven levels" instead of "7 levels hierarchy "
(18) Suggestion only: Instead of using "the organization with flatter structure," use "an organization that has a flatter structure."
(19) Correction: Insert "an."
(20) Correction: You should delete the "although" of the previous sentence - or join that sentence and the sentence that follows. (The use of "although" implies that you will express an opinion that differs from how you began your sentence.)
If you don't join the two sentences, change the second sentence to the following: "However, I disagree very much with it."
If you do join the two sentences, use the following:
"Although some people may argue that a flat (12) organization structure will result in less 'top-down' authority, and therefore reduce the organization's efficiency, I greatly disagree."
(21) Correction: Change "smooth" to "smoothes."
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